Remarking
on his previous two letters, which amounted to fifteen pages of
suggestions, he promises to be brief
He
compliments Mr. Follett for the modifications made to the outline to
this point
A major
point is made to develop the female characters, especially Ellen and Ann
From
the outline the character of William "is a little too 'black' for my
taste" though allowing that once scenes are written for him the reader
"may see him more as he sees himself"
The
third major point made refers to length, offering suggestions on that
account
Three
pages of specific suggestions follow on various points with Mr.
Follett's handwritten annotations
Cover
letter for a 48pp. fax of suggested changes (included in Folder 29)
The
comments are based on the second draft, though a third draft had just
been received by Mr. Golbitz
The
general comments on this cover letter are generally positive for changes
already made in relation to previous suggestions
In
closing: "You imbued the whole tale with the building of a cathedral in
a passionate and awesome way which is trulty unique and truly
unforgettable and then closed the circle"